Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sharma,

I am writing to give you a reminder regading a job offer you gave me in the flight last sunday from Calgary to London I was sitting just next to you on seat number B-17.

As you told me that you owned one of the best food restaurent named 'HELLO BURGERS' all over the canada from that time i was curious to ask you about a job for me. From last three years i worked in 'Twin otters' where i learned appitizers, brunches, dishes and more over their. Also, i have one year of experience working as a manager.

So, it will be great if you provide me the same opportunity in one of your restaurent because its my passion to work in food line and i am great in handing customers and inventing new dishes and i also see bussiness as i am the owner to make it to great heights.

I will like to hear it from you for a opportunity.

Yours faithfully

Amrit pal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is inconsistent; while the content is relevant, the phrasing is occasionally informal or awkward, such as 'I am writing to give you a reminder'. To improve, ensure the tone remains professional throughout, as this is a business-related correspondence. The ideas are generally clear, but could be more effectively developed to demonstrate a stronger professional persona.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs feels abrupt. There are also issues with punctuation, such as missing commas and periods, which affects the flow of ideas. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences more fluidly, and ensure that your paragraphing is clearly defined.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several spelling errors ('regading', 'restaurent', 'appitizers', 'bussiness') and word choice issues ('food line', 'great in handing'). These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent understanding. To improve, you should focus on accurate spelling of common professional terms and work on collocations—for example, instead of 'food line', use 'hospitality industry'. Expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in the flight'), incorrect verb tenses ('I worked' instead of 'I have worked'), and punctuation errors (run-on sentences). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading your work for basic punctuation and sentence boundaries would significantly enhance the accuracy of your writing.

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