Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Singh,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to have an conversation about a possible job opening in one of your restaurants.

To being with, I would like to remind you about our meeting in a recent plane journey from Halifax to Toronto on 22nd August 2026. Moreover, during our journey you provided me with the information about the chain of restaurants you own and offer me to contact you for any possible job posting available.

Consequently, I am contacting you because I am looking for a job as a Food Counter Attendant in North York. In my opinion, I would be a great fit as I have 2 years of professional experience in restaurant of Toronto simultaneously I had 2 years of diploma in Hotel Management from Seneca College. In addition to it, I have attached my CV including cover letter for your reference.

To conclude, I am looking for Full Time job position and available 7 days a week.

Thank you for your time and consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Parneet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly reminded the recipient of the meeting context, specified the desired role, and provided relevant background regarding your experience and qualifications. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter, and the purpose of the communication is clear from the outset. To improve further, you could expand slightly on why you are specifically interested in this particular restaurant chain, which would add a more personal touch and demonstrate greater engagement with the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph serving a distinct purpose. You have used some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Consequently', and 'In addition to it' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. For instance, 'To being with' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. Additionally, the paragraphing is clear, but the connection between the final sentence and the preceding information could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'professional experience', 'qualifications', and 'consideration'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'have an conversation' should be 'have a conversation', and 'offer me to contact you' is unnatural; a better phrasing would be 'suggested that I contact you'. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, you need to focus on more precise collocations and avoid minor errors in word formation to reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'To being with' (should be 'To begin with'), 'in restaurant of Toronto' (missing article 'a' and preposition 'in'), and 'I had 2 years of diploma' (should be 'I hold a diploma'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and verb tense consistency will significantly improve your accuracy.

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