Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr Kapoor,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to continue our follow-up conversation.

Actually, last month I traveled by plane from Mumbai to London and you seated next to me. During our formal conversation, you discussed about your chain of restaurants business and I expressed my interest in working in one of your establishments.

I have a extensive past experience as a manager, therefore, I am keen to work as a manager in one of your restaurant in order to develop professional skills. Also, these position will access me to explore new work atmosphere and inculcate diverse capabilities like confidence, standard personality and financial success for overall growth and career.

I know a managerial post required good communication, cooperation, critical-thinking and problem-solving skills for better management and maintaining friendly work environment, which I already have. Moreover, I am responsible, discipline, polite and punctual person, which qualities promote me to build strong professional reputation. Therefore, having all essential criteria encourage me for the managerial position .

I hope you consider my request and appoint me as a manager in one of your establishment. I look forward to your positive response in this matter.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided a rationale for your suitability. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanation of 'suitability' is more concrete; for example, instead of listing abstract qualities like 'standard personality,' you could briefly mention a specific achievement from your past management experience to make your case more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the initial meeting to your job interest and finally your qualifications. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate these ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Also, these position will access me' and 'Therefore, having all essential criteria encourage me.' Improving the variety and natural flow of your linking words would help the text read more smoothly and elevate the coherence score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'establishments,' 'professional reputation,' and 'critical-thinking.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice or non-standard collocations, such as 'inculcate diverse capabilities' (inculcate is usually used for values or habits, not capabilities) and 'standard personality.' Additionally, there are minor errors like 'these position' (should be 'this position') and 'discipline' (should be 'disciplined'). Focusing on collocations and word forms will help improve your precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'you seated next to me' (should be 'you were seated' or 'you sat'), 'you discussed about' (discuss is transitive; no 'about' needed), and 'managerial post required' (should be 'requires'). Furthermore, there are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'these position will access me' and 'qualities promote me.' Increasing your attention to verb tenses and agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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