Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my interest to work with you in your restaurant as a Manager in one of your restaurant.

Last Friday, while our flight journey from Seattle to Vancouver I was sitting besides you. During that journey, I had a chance to share my skills, experience in managing food chain businesses and my recent studies in business management. After our conversation you suggested me to remind you for a job opening in one of your restaurant in Vancouver.

Considering my experience, education and skills I think management role could fit for me. However, I have been working as a supervisor in a hotel for more than 8 years, but now I would like to elevate my career as a manager where I could take operational decisions by myself.

As you know I have 8 years of experience handling food chain businesses in Vancouver and I have deep understanding of handling local customers along with foreign guests which is a majority of your customer base. Additionally, my outstanding command on multiple language make me a good fit for managerial position.

Let me know about any opportunity relevant to my experience. I also attached my detail resume for your reference.

Kind regards

Ash

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly identify the context of the meeting (last Friday on a flight from Seattle to Vancouver), specify the desired role (Manager), and provide a logical justification for your suitability based on your eight years of experience in the food chain industry. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that you avoid minor inconsistencies, such as the pluralization error in 'one of your restaurant' and the slightly repetitive phrasing regarding your experience. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the response is well-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph serves a distinct purpose, moving from the introduction and context to your qualifications and finally the call to action. You use cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'However' to connect your thoughts. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated. For instance, the link between your experience and your suitability could be strengthened with more varied cohesive markers. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the different requirements of the task, making the letter easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'elevate my career' and 'operational decisions' are well-chosen for a professional context. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and awkward collocations, such as 'share my skills, experience in managing food chain businesses' and 'outstanding command on multiple language'. The latter should be 'command of multiple languages'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the use of vocabulary from being considered 'flexible' or 'precise' at a higher level. Expanding your range of professional collocations would improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'while our flight journey' (should be 'during our flight'), 'suggested me to remind you' (should be 'suggested that I remind you'), and 'make me a good fit' (subject-verb agreement: 'makes'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the letter. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. The majority of your sentences are understandable, but more consistent control over complex structures is needed for a higher band.

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