Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear businessman,

i am writing this email to bring your attention regarding our last meeting in plane when we both travelled Delhi to Punjab. Firstly, i would like to address that you was saying me that you have many hotels and restaurants in all over the India I as i am good cook i want to do job in your one of Restaurant as Chief. Also, I want to suggest that i can make different kind of dishes which belongs to other countries.

Further more, i am interested in this job because i love cooking and it is my passion . I still remember that when there are small parties at my home i always prepared different dishes which really liked by my friends and family members. So, I think i am suitable for this job.

I hope to hear from you soon regarding my job.

Kind regards,

Gursimran Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: you reminded the recipient of the meeting, specified the job you are interested in, and explained your suitability. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention you are a 'good cook', you could have provided more specific details about your culinary experience or professional background to make your application more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, although the opening 'Dear businessman' is unnatural; a more professional approach would be to use a name or a formal title like 'Dear Mr. [Surname]'. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the content lacks the depth expected for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Also', and 'Further more' to connect your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the jump between describing the meeting and stating your job interest is a bit abrupt. Additionally, the use of punctuation is inconsistent, which affects the overall readability. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that transitions smoothly into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your intentions clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary such as 'restaurants', 'cooking', and 'dishes'. However, there are instances of word-choice errors and unnatural phrasing, such as 'Chief' (likely meaning 'Chef') and 'in all over the India'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise professional terminology and work on collocations, such as 'culinary skills' instead of 'good cook' and 'international cuisine' instead of 'dishes which belongs to other countries'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You make several grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading, such as 'you was saying me' (should be 'you told me'), 'in plane' (should be 'on a plane'), and 'i always prepared' (should be 'I always prepare'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'the India') are also problematic. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and ensuring that articles and prepositions are used correctly in a professional context.

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