Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am Priya, a tall and thin girl who sat next to you during the plane journey yesterday. Hope you remember. We had conversation that I should contact you letter about a possible job in one of your restaurants. I writing in regards of what kind of job roll I can truly justified.

I am interested in position of human resource manager in one of your restaurant because I have experience of that. I had been working as human resources manager in local company in my town .

I ensure you that I can perform that role efficiently because I completed my graduation from bachlour of commerce where I study about the responsibility and job work of the job role. I have all the quality that can justify this position like coordination, organization and problem solving.As I mentioned before I have enough experience of it.

I am Lookinf forward to receiving your response.I already pin my CV with this letter.Kaind regard

Kind regards,

Priya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully identified the context of the meeting, specified the desired role (Human Resources Manager), and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your degree and skills like 'coordination' and 'organization', these points are stated rather than fully explained or linked to the specific needs of a restaurant business. To reach a higher band, try to elaborate on how your specific skills would benefit a restaurant environment, rather than just listing them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'As I mentioned before' is a bit abrupt, and there are issues with referencing, such as 'I writing in regards of what kind of job roll I can truly justified.' The flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'given that') to create a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'job roll' instead of 'job role', 'pin my CV' instead of 'attached my CV', and 'justified' used incorrectly in place of 'perform' or 'excel'. While your meaning is generally clear, these errors and the limited range of vocabulary prevent a higher score. Focus on learning common collocations related to professional correspondence to improve your accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tense ('I had been working' should be 'I worked'), article usage ('in local company' should be 'in a local company'), and sentence structure ('We had conversation that I should contact you letter'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are noticeable and occur across a range of structures. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy. Attempting more complex sentence structures while ensuring they are error-free would also help raise your score.

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