Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Macdonald,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this to remind you that we had a chat last week during we were in Air India flight from Dubai to India.

As we discussed, about your food chain business McDonald, which is popular across the world. I go through the website and understand the food chain and the market. For this reason, I would like to be part your business, as I am a chief by profession and completed my education.

Moreover, I have experience of couple of years in Subway and would like to join McDonald food chain which is wisely renowned. Furthermore, I have seen that Kitchener location is hiring kitchen staff, and this location extremely convenient for me in terms of travel and my previous experience helps me to learn your food process easily.

If you need any further information please reach out to me. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Rishil

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly identify the context of the meeting, specify your interest in a kitchen staff position, and provide relevant reasons for your suitability, such as your professional background as a chef and your experience at Subway. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanation of why you are suitable is slightly more developed; for instance, you could elaborate on specific skills you gained at your previous job that would directly benefit the restaurant chain.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'For this reason' to link your ideas. However, the progression between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is generally appropriate, though the body of the letter could be more clearly divided to separate your professional experience from your specific interest in the Kitchener location. Overall, the message is easy to follow, and the structure supports the purpose of the letter effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'profession', 'convenient', and 'renowned'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'chief' instead of 'chef' and 'wisely renowned' instead of 'widely renowned'. Additionally, the phrase 'I go through the website' should be 'I have gone through the website' or 'I have researched the website'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over vocabulary and common collocations to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'during we were in Air India flight' (should be 'while we were on an Air India flight') and 'part your business' (should be 'part of your business'). There are also issues with article usage and prepositions. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions in complex sentences.

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