Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

My name is Supreet Kaur. I am attaching my resume in this letter to give more detail about my work experience.

I would like to remind you regarding our conversation which held in the plan when we were travelling from Vancouver to Toronto related to work. As you had talked about your chains of restaurant which are located in the Vancouver.

I have keen interest in the role of the supervisor or front cashier as earlier I have worked in the fast pace environment and I am able to handle the restaurant in all kinds of situation. I remain calm even when customer's behavior is quite upset.

I would be perfect person to handle your restaurant with great care and I will try my best to upsell your sides to attract more customers. Moreover, I am very punctual with time as I always come ten minutes early from starting shift.

I would be waiting for the reply.

Yours Faithfully,

Supreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context (Vancouver to Toronto flight), identified the desired roles (supervisor or cashier), and provided reasons for your suitability (experience in fast-paced environments and punctuality). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your skills and the specific needs of a restaurant chain is more thoroughly developed. For example, instead of just mentioning 'upselling sides,' you could elaborate on how your customer service skills would specifically contribute to the restaurant's reputation or efficiency.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'as,' though the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly. Some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Ensure that your referencing is precise; for instance, 'our conversation which held in the plan' is slightly awkward and could be better linked to the previous sentence to improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'keen interest,' 'fast-paced environment,' and 'punctual.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'conversation which held in the plan' (should be 'took place on the plane') and 'customer's behavior is quite upset' (should be 'customers are upset' or 'difficult behavior'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit your ability to convey ideas with precision. Expanding your vocabulary to include more specific professional terminology would enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'chains of restaurant' (should be 'chains of restaurants'), 'in the Vancouver' (remove 'the'), and 'I would be perfect person' (should be 'the perfect person'). Additionally, 'I would be waiting for the reply' is slightly unnatural; 'I look forward to hearing from you' is the standard professional convention. Despite these errors, the sentence structures are varied enough to maintain interest, and the errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message.

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