Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Aman,

I hope you are doing well, I would like to remind you about the job you offered me while we are seating next to each other in flight coming from India to Canda.

To elaborate we both meet when we are come back from our home county in the month of January in Air Canada airlines.

We talk a lot things about India tasty food recipes and you mention that you run South Indian food chain restaurants.

I like to talk about the position you mention while talking that you are looking for a allrounder manager who look after you on the staff while also managing there works hours. Honestly I love to have this job as it directly help's me gain good experience which help in my future.

As, I mention in our first meet that I have to much interest in food sector that never getting me bored while working in this sector.

I hope you update Back with a positive reply.

Best Regards,

Rishi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: you reminded the recipient of the meeting, specified the job you are interested in, and explained your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional follow-up letter. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention you are interested in an 'allrounder manager' position, your explanation of why you are suitable is quite brief and relies on general statements rather than specific skills or past experiences. To improve, try to provide concrete examples of your work ethic or relevant background to make a stronger case for your candidacy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the introduction to the purpose of the letter and finally the closing. Paragraphing is present, though the paragraphs are quite short and could be better connected. You use some basic cohesive devices, such as 'To elaborate' and 'As, I mention', but the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed due to grammatical errors. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression of ideas could be smoother if you used a wider variety of linking words to connect your thoughts more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'food sector', 'recipes', and 'manager'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'allrounder manager' (which should be 'all-round manager' or 'general manager') and 'update Back' (which should be 'get back to me'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise professional terminology and avoid repetitive phrasing. Spelling errors, such as 'Canda' instead of 'Canada', also detract from the professional quality of the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You struggle with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, for example: 'we both meet when we are come back' (should be 'we met when we were coming back') and 'help's me' (should be 'helps me'). Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with comma splices and missing articles. While the meaning remains understandable, the frequency of these grammatical errors is noticeable and occasionally interrupts the flow of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency would significantly improve your score.

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