Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Elon,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter in regards, to apply for job at one of your Michelin star restaurant.

We met on the Emirate airways when travelling from Dubai to India. Our seats were together 7A & 7B. First of all, i want to appreciate your offer for asking me to work for one of your 5 star hotel. This opportunity will not only build my confidence but, will also assist me in learning new complex skills.

I guess i am good at customer service or anything which requires leadership skills i am 100% sure i can do it well. I am punctual & disciplined when it comes to following policies and procedures. Overall, i enjoy working in a team and my only focus is to push everyone, to get their maximum potential.

Although, I have experience in hospitality industry for more than 7 years. I have worked in various luxurious restaurant in India. One of the best trait, about me is i do not get panic in any situation, I try my best to mitigate any problem which occurs.

Looking forward for your response. I hope you consider me for this position.

Regards,

Harsh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly identified the context of the meeting, specified your interest in a leadership or customer service role, and provided relevant reasons for your suitability, such as your seven years of experience. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional letter, although it leans slightly informal in places. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your experience and the specific needs of a Michelin-star restaurant is more explicitly articulated to show a deeper understanding of the target role.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'First of all' and 'Although', to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by mechanical errors in punctuation and sentence structure. For instance, the use of commas is sometimes intrusive, such as in 'in regards, to apply'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that paragraph transitions are smoother would enhance the overall readability and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'punctual', 'disciplined', 'mitigate', and 'hospitality industry'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'luxurious restaurant' (should be 'luxury restaurant') and 'get panic' (should be 'get panicked' or 'panic'). Additionally, the repetition of 'one of your' in the first and second paragraphs reduces the sophistication of your expression. Expanding your range of professional collocations would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include the misuse of articles ('apply for job'), subject-verb agreement issues, and incorrect comma placement. The use of 'i' instead of the capitalized 'I' is a recurring error that should be avoided in formal writing. While your meaning is always clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic capitalization and article usage.

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