Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Armaan,

I hope you are doing well. Thank you for sharing your email with me while we met at Chicago airport last Friday. As you offered me to help with the job in one of your restaurants in Los Vegas, I wanT to apply for position of manager there. I am looking for a Job as a general Manager since one month. Unfortunately, I am unsuccessful to find one. As you asked me about my background information I want to tell you that I finished my education in marketing field. After my studies, I worked as a manager in Tim Hortons for almost 4 years where I delivered a great service to ensure good productivity as well as great customer experience. Recently, I had to move to Los Vegas due to my further studies and I am not working anywhere currently. As I have good experience working as a manager I will really appreciate if you can consider me for an interview for manager position in your restaurant. I will also attach my resume with this letter. Please feel to call me if you have any further questions.

Kind regards

Komal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly identified the meeting context (Chicago airport), specified the desired role (manager), and provided a relevant justification for your suitability by highlighting your four years of experience at Tim Hortons and your marketing background. The tone is appropriate for a professional letter, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide slightly more depth in your justification; for example, you could mention a specific achievement or skill gained during your tenure at Tim Hortons to make your candidacy more compelling.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the initial meeting to the job application and finally to your qualifications. Paragraphing is used, though the letter would benefit from a more distinct separation between the introduction, the body paragraphs, and the closing. You use some cohesive devices like 'After my studies' and 'Recently', but the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly. Currently, some sentences feel slightly disjointed, and the transition between your background and your current situation could be smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task. You use relevant professional terms such as 'productivity', 'customer experience', and 'resume'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am unsuccessful to find one' (should be 'I have been unsuccessful in finding one') and 'finished my education in marketing field' (should be 'finished my education in the field of marketing'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from being considered 'flexible' or 'precise' at a higher band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'while we met' (should be 'when we met'), 'since one month' (should be 'for one month'), and 'Please feel to call me' (missing 'free'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and capitalization issues, such as 'Los Vegas' (should be 'Las Vegas') and 'manager' (should be capitalized when referring to a specific job title). While these errors are noticeable, they do not cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on verb tense consistency and preposition usage.

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