Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the possibility of joining one of your chain restaurants, which we had discussed during plane journey from Ottawa to Toronto.

We were flew the same airlines and It was great opportunity to meet you and share some ideas. Similarly, some pragmatic ways to improve chain restaurants revenue and possibility to join one of your branches.

I had a five years of experience as a store manager likewise, good communication and problem solving skills. I felt I can manage one of your branch which is located in Toronto near metro station as a restaurant manager.

I can manage that restaurant because I deeply understand its mission and vision. If something unexpected happened during a time of employment, not only financial part I can handle all the employees with good practical problem solving skills.

I hope my skills and experience match the company guideline and policy. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,

Keshav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: it reminds the recipient of the meeting, specifies the desired role, and explains the candidate's suitability. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention your experience as a store manager, the explanation of why you are suitable for this specific restaurant is slightly repetitive and lacks professional depth. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, though the opening 'Dear Sir' is a bit generic given you met the person personally. To improve, ensure each point is fully expanded with more specific professional details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Similarly, some pragmatic ways...' which does not connect well to the previous sentence. The transition between the meeting context and your qualifications could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical issues, which makes the text feel slightly disjointed in places.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'pragmatic', 'mission and vision', and 'unexpected'. However, there are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'we were flew' (should be 'we were on the same flight') and 'financial part' (which is vague). Some phrases are slightly unnatural, such as 'manage one of your branch'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise professional collocations and ensuring that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as 'We were flew' (passive voice error), 'a five years of experience' (article/pluralization error), and 'manage one of your branch' (singular/plural error). Additionally, the sentence 'not only financial part I can handle all the employees' is structurally awkward. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.

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