Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Smith,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to remind you about a possible job in one of his restaurants. However, I am highly interested to work in this sector as it helps me to grow further.

To begin with, on July 22nd , we meet at the Toronto international airport and during the plane journey, we had a talk about your business in the hotel industry since 2006. I was really surprised by your growth in this industry. However, I would like to work as a cook in one of your restaurant as I have been working in this sector since 2 years. Even, I have finished my masters in culinary management. I think this job suits me really well as it aligns with my education. I hope this information assist you with further process. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Your's sincerely,

Riddhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the reader of the meeting, specified your interest in a cook position, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is slightly inconsistent. In the opening, you refer to 'his restaurants' instead of 'your restaurants,' which is a significant error in perspective for a formal letter. Additionally, the development of your suitability is somewhat brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that your tone remains consistently professional and that you clearly link your experience to the specific needs of the businessman's restaurant chain.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and closing. Paragraphing is used, though the transition between the opening and the body could be smoother. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'However,' but the use of 'However' is occasionally repetitive and sometimes used incorrectly to connect ideas that are not contrasting. The referencing is generally clear, though the pronoun error mentioned in the task achievement section slightly disrupts the flow. Overall, the message is easy to follow, but the use of cohesive devices could be more varied and precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'culinary management' and 'aligns with my education.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'since 2 years' should be 'for 2 years,' and 'assist you with further process' is slightly unnatural. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands. Focusing on correct preposition usage and more sophisticated collocations related to professional correspondence would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'we meet' (should be 'we met') and 'in one of your restaurant' (should be 'restaurants'). The phrase 'Your's sincerely' is also incorrect; it should be 'Yours sincerely.' While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tense consistency—specifically shifting from the past tense for the meeting to the present for your current qualifications—and ensure subject-verb agreement and pluralization are accurate.

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