Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear MR John.

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this to request a job position in your restaurant in Chicago.

We met last Friday in a plane journey from Toronto to Chicago. We had a great conversation on different topic and in the end you gave me of your business card to contact for job.

Currently I am working as a sales manager in a hardware company in Timmins, Ontario and I am planning to move to Chicago next month, actually I did some research on your restaurants chain and I find very passionate about the book keeping position in your restaurant.

There are several skills which directly aligned me for this position. Firstly, I have a deep financial knowledge in this sector, I always try to make things according to step by step under the company guidelines. Moreover, I consider myself has a muti-task person, I am not that kind of person who afraid to cross comfort zone.

Thank you for your time consideration. I am attaching all further details for your reference. I look forward to your prompt reply.

Best Regards.

Simranjeet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly identified the meeting context, specified the desired role, and provided reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional follow-up, although the opening 'Dear MR John' is slightly informal and incorrect in its salutation format. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, providing enough detail to make your intentions clear to the recipient. To improve, ensure that the salutation matches the professional nature of the request, such as 'Dear Mr. [Surname],'. Overall, the task requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, moving from the introduction to the specific request and then to your qualifications. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Moreover' to link your arguments. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition in the third paragraph regarding your research could be better connected to your interest in the bookkeeping position. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate and the message is coherent.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'passionate', 'financial knowledge', and 'multi-task'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'in a plane journey' (should be 'on a plane journey') and 'make things according to step by step' (which is awkward phrasing). You also use 'muti-task' as an adjective, which is non-standard. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage to reach a higher band. Expanding your range of professional collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I find very passionate' (missing the subject 'it' or 'myself'), 'I consider myself has a muti-task person' (incorrect verb form), and 'who afraid' (missing the verb 'is'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in capitalization and article usage. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses and prepositions.

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