Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am Ofonedu Cornelius, we met on a flight from Nigeria to Saudi Arabia on the 6th day of August 2026. On that day when handing over your call card you suggested that I should contact you about a possible job openings at your restaurants.

I have three years of experience in the hospitality industry with sound communication skill, I hope to get a role in your restaurant as manager. I strongly believe I am the best fit for this role given my past record and skills I will be bringing to your company. I pride my self with a strong skill of team playing that is key for smoot flow of daily activities and good returns for your organization.

I humbly look forward to your response and hope for a positive outcome on my request to gain employment in your restaurant.

Thanks

Your

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: reminding the recipient of the meeting, stating the desired job, and explaining suitability. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the overall task completion. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the explanation of suitability could have been expanded with more specific examples of past achievements to better persuade the reader. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal business letter, though the sign-off 'Your' is incomplete and unprofessional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and mechanical. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is abrupt. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the lack of varied linking words (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition') makes the flow feel a bit disjointed. Paragraphing is present, but the structure could be improved by ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and sophistication. Phrases like 'sound communication skill' and 'best fit' are functional but common. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'smoot flow' (should be 'smooth flow') and 'pride my self with' (should be 'pride myself on'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise professional terminology related to the hospitality industry and ensure collocations are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'job openings' (should be 'job opening' or 'a job opening'), 'call card' (usually 'business card'), and the incorrect sign-off 'Your'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure in the first paragraph is slightly run-on. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage would improve accuracy.

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