Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope you are doing well.

Do you remember me? recently we met in Air Canada flight while coming from USA to Canada. My seat was beside yours and we had a great conversation especially about my job opportunity in your restaurant.

I'm passionate about the cooking, I would love to join in your cooking department as a chief. regarding my availability, I'm also flexible either day or night shifts as your restaurants operates 24/7. In addition, my expectations on hourly pay would be 20 to 30$ plus HST and its negotiable. If there are no vacancies in Cooking roles, my second option would be restaurant manager.

This opportunity is definitely suitable for my skills. Recently I have completed training also in it. In addition, I secured certificate as a master chief. Also, for the Manager role my qualification is perfectly matching, because I have completed my MBA in hotel management, So I'm delighted to take this opportunity.

I look forward to see your positive response on confirming any of this position considering my qualifications.

Yours faithfully,

John.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified your preferred roles, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is somewhat inconsistent for a formal business letter. While the content is relevant, the development of your suitability could be more professional; for instance, mentioning 'hourly pay' and 'HST' is slightly premature for an initial inquiry letter. To improve, focus on highlighting your professional value proposition more clearly rather than jumping immediately to salary negotiations. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the professional register needs refinement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'Regarding', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or abrupt, such as the jump between discussing the cooking role and the manager role. The use of referencing is generally clear, though the opening paragraph could be more smoothly linked to the purpose of the letter. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, the job details, and the closing, which aids readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'vacancies', 'qualifications', and 'negotiable'. However, there are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. For example, you use 'chief' instead of 'chef', and 'secured certificate' is slightly unnatural; 'obtained a certification' would be more precise. Additionally, 'cooking department' is not standard industry terminology. While your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher band scores. Focusing on industry-specific terminology will help improve your lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include article usage ('in Air Canada flight'), subject-verb agreement ('restaurants operates'), and punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in 'management, So I'm'. There are also minor errors in preposition usage and capitalization ('Cooking roles'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are punctuated correctly.

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