Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr Bassey,

How are you doing together with you family, quite a long time and how is business generally. Am writing to bring to your memory concerning our last discussion when we met on plane during your trip to American together with some of your staffs going for an International food competition. I still remain Mrs Alamu madam cook, am very sure that name ring a bell.

I am a chef by profession and I will be delighted to join your chain of restaurants for available job offer ,especially in the section that have to do with creating food with flour.

If am opportune to be offer the job , that will surely be an advantages to your restaurants since an a professional to the core in stuff that deal with flour, because I have been baking with it for over twenty five years .Have also gone for many competitions both Internationally and Locally with numerous awards to show for it, with all my years of experiences and achievements I believe am fit in for a position in your establishment.

Looking forward to hear from you soonest.

yours sincerely,

Mrs Alamu.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: you reminded the recipient of your meeting, identified the desired role, and explained your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional letter, although it leans slightly informal in places (e.g., 'How are you doing together with you family'). The ideas are relevant and clearly stated, such as your specific interest in flour-based culinary work and your twenty-five years of experience. To reach a higher band, ensure that the purpose of the letter is stated more concisely in the opening, and maintain a consistent professional tone throughout the entire piece.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific request and finally to your qualifications. Paragraphing is present, though the structure could be improved by separating the introduction, the job request, and the closing more distinctly. You use some cohesive devices like 'especially' and 'since', but the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and run-on sentences, such as in the third paragraph where multiple ideas are joined with commas. Improving the use of transition words and varying sentence length would enhance the overall flow and readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'profession', 'establishment', and 'internationally'. However, there are several instances of non-standard word choice and collocation errors, such as 'bring to your memory' (instead of 'remind you'), 'staffs' (the plural of staff is 'staff'), and 'am opportune to be offer' (which should be 'if I am given the opportunity'). These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they do indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and common professional collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('that have to do with', 'that ring a bell') and verb tense usage ('Have also gone for many competitions'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing articles ('on plane', 'as a professional') and incorrect capitalization. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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