Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inquire about a vacancy in one of your restaurants.

To begin with, we met on Air France during the hold of your business-related meeting on June 25 last month. We shared a conversation related to my hometown, Bharuch.

Furthermore, I have completed my bachelor's in accounting now I am here to pursuing my master's in business administration in Vancouver. I am very good at handling multitasking, such as billing, taking orders, managing calls, and preparing orders. Along with this i can learn new work too as i am adapting to learn new skills and information.

Finally, I am really fascinating to doing this job because I am considering having my own business in the future; before that, I want to learn from you how to manage a business and staff. My father owns a restaurant in my home country. Therefore, I want to expand his business here.

I would appreciate your attention to this matter and look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully,

Afroza

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the type of work you are interested in, and provided a clear rationale for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of your ideas is slightly uneven; while you mention your background, explaining your suitability could be more persuasive by linking your specific skills more directly to the restaurant industry. Overall, the response is relevant and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Finally' to structure your points. While these are functional, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the information flows in a way that is easy for the reader to follow. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing between sentences is more precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'inquire', 'vacancy', and 'multitasking'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'fascinating to doing' instead of 'fascinated by the prospect of doing'. Additionally, 'adapting to learn' is slightly unnatural. While you successfully convey your meaning, the vocabulary is somewhat functional rather than sophisticated. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that word forms (e.g., adjectives vs. verbs) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'pursuing my master's' (should be 'pursue'), 'i can learn' (capitalization error), and 'fascinating to doing'. Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'we met on Air France during the hold of your business-related meeting'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage to improve your accuracy.

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