Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Jason,

I hope you are doing well, this is Ridhi I am writing this as we met on a plane journey last week in which we were coming back from Thailand I was sitting just beside you. During our conversation you mentioned about your business of restaurants and that time I was also looking for opportunity for work. You suggested me to connect with you for further discussion.

I am recently graduate from my college where i studied Administration management, to go with my interested field I would like to have an Admin officer or assistant job in your business. I am well maintained and I have a good communication skills. I have achieved all the required certificated needed for this position. I also did my 1 month practicum in this field so I have real world hands-on-hand experience.

I have attached my resume for your consideration. I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss any suitable positions that may be available within your business.

Thank you again for taking the time to speak with me and for giving me the opportunity to connect with you. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,

Ridhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly identified the context of the meeting (a plane journey from Thailand), specified the desired role (Admin officer or assistant), and provided relevant reasons for your suitability, such as your educational background and practical experience. The tone is appropriate for a professional follow-up letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that all ideas are fully developed; for instance, you could have elaborated slightly more on how your specific skills would benefit his restaurant chain, rather than just stating you have the certificates. Overall, the task requirements are met effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your message easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'During our conversation' and 'I have attached my resume'. However, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Some transitions feel slightly mechanical or abrupt. Improving the use of cohesive devices to connect your ideas more fluidly would elevate this score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'practicum', 'consideration', and 'discussion'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am recently graduate' (should be 'I am a recent graduate') and 'hands-on-hand experience' (should be 'hands-on experience'). Additionally, 'well maintained' is not the correct term to describe a person's professional presentation; 'well-presented' or 'professional' would be more appropriate. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise professional collocations would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'this is Ridhi I am writing' (a run-on sentence), 'I am recently graduate' (missing article and incorrect word form), and 'all the required certificated' (should be 'certificates'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move into the higher band range.

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