Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

Hope you are doing well!! I am writing in response to connect with you for the job opportunity available at your restaurant.

I am Bob if you remember, we met last week during our journey to mumbai. You told me get in touch in next few days as you owns many restaurant in mumbai and you are hiring employee for part-time as well as full-time positions.

As I have completed my bachelor degree which is specialied in hotel managment from well-known university. I am interested to work as a restaurant manager or supervisor with a full-time position and good employee benefits. I am ready to join the trainning needed to perform my duties if compulsory in hiring policy. I prefer to work from monday to friday in morning shift as I am having some work to do in evening.

I already check your online website for available position and I think resturant manager is suitable for me to perform all required responsibilities. I had 2 year experience working as a restaurant employee when I was studying at university. I am quite familier with all duties need to be perform and I have good communication and time m

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: you reminded the recipient of your meeting, identified the desired role, and explained your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, although the opening 'Dear Manager' is a bit generic; using the person's name (if known) or a more professional salutation would be better. The ideas are relevant, though the development is slightly uneven. For instance, the mention of your degree and previous experience is good, but the letter ends abruptly mid-sentence, which leaves the final point about your suitability incomplete. To improve, ensure you fully develop your arguments and provide a complete, polished conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some basic cohesive devices, such as 'As I have completed' and 'I already check', to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors and the incomplete final sentence. Paragraphing is present, which helps the reader navigate the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to create a smoother transition between your professional background and your interest in the position.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant industry-specific terms like 'restaurant manager', 'supervisor', and 'employee benefits'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'specialied' (specialized), 'managment' (management), 'trainning' (training), and 'familier' (familiar). These errors do not impede communication, but they do suggest a need for more careful proofreading. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common professional terms and expanding your range of collocations to sound more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('as you owns' instead of 'own'), tense inconsistencies ('I already check' instead of 'I have already checked'), and missing articles. Additionally, the sentence 'I am having some work to do' is slightly unnatural in this context. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. Focusing on verb tense consistency and basic sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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