Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hello Sir,

How are you? Hope you will be fine.

I am writing this letter just to remind you that we met on a flight from Karachi to Lahore last Saturday.

I was really impressed by your personality and I was really delighted to meet you.

Dear Sir, during our conversation you told me that you own a very large chain of restaurants in the city. Sir I am interested in restaurant management job in your reputable restaurant. I have previous experience of hotel management and I would like to offer my services.

I think I can perform management job well because as I have mentioned I have a vast experience of this job.

I would request you to personally look into this and consider me for this job.

I have also attached my updated CV.

Thank you Sir,

Hoping for a positive response from you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: the meeting context, the job interest, and the suitability. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the overall task completion. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the explanation of suitability is repetitive, relying on the phrase 'vast experience' without providing specific examples or details about the skills gained. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your professional background and provide more specific reasons why you are a strong candidate for the role.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, with a clear progression from the introduction to the request and the closing. However, the paragraphing is weak; the text is essentially a series of short, choppy sentences rather than well-developed paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and the transition between ideas feels mechanical. For example, the repetition of 'Dear Sir' and 'Sir' at the start of sentences creates a repetitive flow. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'given that') would help the ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and sophistication. You rely on basic descriptors like 'very large' and 'well'. There is some repetition of words such as 'job' and 'restaurant'. While the meaning is clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more precise professional terminology related to the hospitality industry and avoid repeating the same nouns and adjectives throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the range is limited. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'restaurant management job' (missing an article) and 'as I have mentioned I have a vast experience' (slightly awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but the overuse of short, simple sentences makes the writing feel less fluent. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of complex sentence structures and ensure articles (a/an/the) are used correctly before singular countable nouns.

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