Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Raj,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this to inform about the possible job in one of your restaurants.

My name is Sam Mistry and We met in the plane while travelling to Waterloo. It was on 10th August in the morning. As I already know that you owns a huge chain of restaurants at the Pearson Airport. Moreover, we also discussed about making contact with me for the suitable job. I am interested in any customer representative type of jobs which can be any kind of job that can include conversation with customers, making some order and deliver it.

I believe I would be suitable for this job as I have experience in customer representative service and I have also done few logistics duties. Therefore, I think I have necessary skills to be a good employee at the Booster Juice.

If you think I am suitable for this job, I would love to share my resume.

Yours faithfully,

Sam Mistry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, although the closing 'Yours faithfully' is technically used when the recipient's name is unknown; since you addressed the letter to 'Raj', 'Yours sincerely' would be more accurate. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, meeting the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different points requested. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Therefore' to link ideas, although the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'this job') is always precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'customer representative' and 'logistics duties'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'making some order' (should be 'taking orders') and 'you owns' (a grammatical error affecting lexical accuracy). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focusing on common business collocations will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'you owns' (subject-verb agreement), 'in the plane' (should be 'on the plane'), and 'I have also done few logistics duties' (missing article 'a'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.

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