Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well sir. I am writing to request you regarding a job in your restaurants named as "spicy kitchen".

I hope you vividly remember me , we met in aeroplane when we travelled from regina to Calgary on 23rd of June , you sat next to me in premium class of plan. On that time you informed me you are the businessman and owns the restaurant chain. you talked me if you need any type of restaurant then contact me due to this , I write this letter .

Nowdays, I totally unemployed and I do not have any kind of job. Although I have 8 year experience in chef department, I faced failure to get the good job. I am very good chef my rating on google 4.5 star out of five. I am well cook the Indian ,Turkish and Chinese food.

I would appreciate if you give the job as a chef in your food chain because I have too much experience. I am not only the good in cooking , but also I have good communication skill and team lead quality. If you give me the job I do with my proper attention and never harsh you.

I look forward for your response .

your faithfully,

James wilson

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is inconsistent; while it is a formal letter, phrases like 'never harsh you' and 'I am totally unemployed' are slightly unnatural or overly informal for a professional business context. To improve, ensure that your language remains consistently professional throughout. The ideas are relevant, but some development, such as the mention of your Google rating, feels slightly out of place in a formal job inquiry letter. Focusing more on professional achievements would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'due to this , I write this letter' is awkward. Additionally, the punctuation is inconsistent, with several instances of spaces before commas (e.g., 'me , we met'). Paragraphing is present, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in addition to.' Improving the control of referencing and punctuation will help the text flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'chef department' and 'well cook' are non-standard. You also rely on basic descriptors like 'good' multiple times. While you attempt to use some specific terminology related to the restaurant industry, the lack of precision in word choice occasionally hinders the professional tone. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations, such as 'culinary experience' instead of 'experience in chef department,' and avoid repetitive, simple adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of the writing. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses ('you talked me if you need'), missing articles ('in aeroplane'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('I have 8 year experience'). Punctuation is also a significant issue, particularly the incorrect spacing before commas and the misuse of capitalization. While the meaning remains clear despite these errors, the frequency of mistakes prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation will significantly improve your score.

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