Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to thank you for your help and support during my last plane journey. On 20th November I traveled Dhaka to Rajshahi by air and I sat beside you. you told me about your restaurant business. I was surprised to know you hardworking and dedication story you did your young life. your restaurants are very popular in our country and young generations are very interested to get job in such company.

After a long conversation you invited me in your head office and you want me as an employee in your company. I have 3 years work experience in food industry. Recently I work as an operations manager at a well known restaurant company. I would like to switch the job because it is my pleasurer to work with a big company.

I have a great communication skills and I can handle any complex situation very patiently. These are very important in restaurant sector work.

I would be happy to provide any additional details if required. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

yours faithfully

xyz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, specified your interest in an operations role, and justified your suitability by mentioning your three years of experience. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear sir' is slightly generic; using the businessman's name would have been more professional. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, fulfilling the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your message easily. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'After a long conversation' and 'These are very important', to link your sentences. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that transitions between sentences are smoother. Overall, the structure is coherent and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'operations manager' and 'complex situation' correctly. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'pleasurer' (pleasure) and 'hardworking and dedication story' (hard work and dedication). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic or professional collocations. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in food industry'), incorrect verb tenses ('Recently I work'), and punctuation issues. For example, 'you told me about your restaurant business' should be capitalized, and 'young generations are very interested to get job' requires articles. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will improve your accuracy.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.