Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear shang,

I hope you are in good spirits. I am writing to since I want to work with your Organisation. We previously met on the plane while travelling to the London from India if you remember, I was just sat next to you and we had a conversation about your business.

Actually, I recently finished my studies in cookery course nevertheless you are running a restaurant. I feel like I would like to join your company due to my studies are totally relevant for this job. Moreover, you told me that you are looking for new chef and I decided that I can do the chef job or if you have any other job opportunity for me please consider my application. I am really found of making dishes with a variety of flavours so chef position is more suitable to me, I am ready for any interview that you or your staff want to have.

I sincerely appreciate if you consider my application. I will look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Thank you very much.

Warm regards,

Kim.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the reader of the meeting on the plane, identified your interest in a chef position, and explained your suitability through your recent cookery studies. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the explanation of why you are suitable could be more persuasive by highlighting specific skills or experiences gained during your course. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional follow-up, though it occasionally slips into informal phrasing. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, but more detail would have strengthened the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Actually' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the meeting context and the job application is a bit abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel disjointed due to awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'organisation', 'relevant', and 'opportunity'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'I am really found of' (should be 'fond of') and 'I am writing to since' (missing a verb). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to professional correspondence and proofreading for small errors that affect the naturalness of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'travelling to the London' (unnecessary article), 'due to my studies are totally relevant' (incorrect clause structure), and 'I sincerely appreciate if you consider' (should be 'would appreciate'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of conjunctions to improve the accuracy of your complex sentences.

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