Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Smith,

I hope you are doing well .I am gurpreet kaur and I am writing this letter to remind you about an opportunity that you have offered me during our conversation on recent flight journey regarding possible job that I can get in one of your restaurants .

Moving further, Actually I am interested in a job which is related to the hospitality industry . Because I already had three years experience in this specific field .As I moved to winnipeg recently ,so ,in this new city it will easier for me to do a job in this particular sector with the help of your reference .

Moreover, it would be suitable for me to have job in hospitality sector, because i know certain skills regarding it such as interpersonal skills, communication, leadership, teamwork . Therefore, these skills will make me more efficient in a job to adapt the enviornment or to cop up the situations easily.

I look farword for hearing from your side and i am excited to join one of your resturant as well.

Your faithfully

Gurpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, specified your interest in the hospitality industry, and provided reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal business letter, although the opening 'Dear Smith' is slightly unnatural; 'Dear Mr. Smith' would be more standard. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, fulfilling the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Therefore', and 'Moving further' to connect your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Moving further' to start a paragraph. The progression of ideas is clear, and the overall structure is easy to follow, which supports the reader's understanding of your purpose.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'hospitality industry', 'interpersonal skills', and 'efficient'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'enviornment' (environment) and 'cop up' (cope with). While you successfully convey your meaning, the vocabulary is somewhat functional and lacks the more sophisticated collocations or idiomatic expressions that would elevate the response to a higher band. Focus on refining spelling and ensuring precise word usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors, including punctuation issues (e.g., spaces before periods), capitalization errors (e.g., 'winnipeg'), and tense inconsistencies. For example, 'I already had three years experience' should be 'I have three years of experience'. Additionally, 'Your faithfully' is incorrect; the standard closing is 'Yours faithfully'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation will improve your accuracy.

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