Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I hope this letter meet well with you. i want to express my interest for the intention in possible job vacancies in one of you restaurants.

We meet at Asaba international airport on the 19th of December, onboard trip to Lagos, Nigeria. we discussed and exchanged contacts during the journey.

I would be interested in the position of a marketing officer, during my degree course in the university, i major in marketing and finance, where i can help to plan a upgrading and making advertisements to create customer awareness.

i am a graduate of digital marketing and sociology, i have worked in the marketing department in one of hotels in Asaba, i have developed good customer relationship, good communication skills, i have also learnt how to resolve and calm agitated customer. i believe i can apply those skills i have to you great company to boost productivity.

Thank you in anticipation for your favorable response.

Yours faithfully

Origbakpor.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You clearly identified the meeting context, specified the desired role, and provided relevant reasons for your suitability. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your degree and previous experience, the explanation of how these specifically translate to the businessman's restaurant chain is a bit generic. To reach a higher band, ensure that your reasons are more directly linked to the specific needs of a restaurant business, rather than just stating your qualifications. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening and closing salutations need refinement to match the prompt's requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the meeting details, then to the job interest and qualifications. Paragraphing is present, which helps the reader navigate the text. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the frequent use of 'I' at the start of sentences makes the flow feel a bit stilted. Furthermore, some transitions between ideas are abrupt, such as the jump from your degree to your specific marketing tasks. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in addition to this' would improve the overall flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'marketing officer', 'customer awareness', and 'agitated customer'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'meet well with you' instead of 'hope this letter finds you well' and 'plan a upgrading' instead of 'plan upgrades'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do highlight a limited control over more sophisticated vocabulary. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are precise and natural in a professional context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'I hope this letter meet well', 'We meet at Asaba', 'i major in marketing'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing capital letters for the pronoun 'I'. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic proofreading for tense consistency and capitalization would significantly improve your accuracy.

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