Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing this missive regarding the job opportunity at one of your restaurants as we had a conversation we were travelling from Delhi to Canada in air India flight BL168 on 25th June, I was setting next to your cabin.

I have a cooking certification from great institution in Canada in addition to that I have been working in a restaurant from the post two years as a lead chef, and i am looking for the same role in one of your restaurants

As we discussed in plan that you have various restaurants in Canada and you need someone who have great knowledge of various cuisines from different part of the work and i believe i would be the right person for this position.

Please let me know if your need further information about my experience and qualifications

Looking forward to here from you.

Yours faithfully

GURJIT BAGGA

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided a justification for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal business letter, although the opening 'Dear sir' is slightly generic; using the businessman's name would have been more professional. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, fulfilling the requirements of the prompt effectively. To improve, ensure that the connection between your experience and the specific needs of the restaurant chain is slightly more detailed to fully develop the argument for your suitability.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific request and finally the closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the different points, which helps the reader navigate the text. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and occasionally mechanical. For instance, the transition between the meeting details and the job description could be smoother. Some sentences are slightly run-on, such as the first paragraph, which impacts the flow. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'given that') would improve the overall cohesion and make the writing feel more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'opportunity', 'certification', and 'cuisines'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'missive' (which is overly formal and slightly archaic in this context), 'setting' instead of 'sitting', and 'post two years' instead of 'past two years'. Additionally, 'work' is used instead of 'world'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage and careful proofreading to ensure that the intended meaning is conveyed accurately and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('we were travelling' vs 'we were travelling'), missing articles ('in air India flight'), and punctuation errors (the lack of full stops between sentences). For example, the first paragraph is essentially one long, run-on sentence. While you attempt complex structures, the control over them is inconsistent. To reach a higher band, focus on sentence boundary punctuation and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for basic errors like 'your' vs 'you' and 'here' vs 'hear' will also significantly improve your score.

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