Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr. Patel,

I am writing to express my immense interest working in one of your restaurant located in Vancouver downtown location and also like to thank you for sharing your carer life during our recent travel to India.

First and foremost, having you next to me in the Air Canada flight during our recent travel on date 5th August 2026 , was an pleasure for me. which was not only a memorable event but also a motivational carer route.

In regarding the position, I would like to work as a project coordinator which not only help me to nhance my skills but also provide me a platform to use my learning

Thnak you

Your faithfully

Vikrant

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development is insufficient. You mention the meeting, the job, and your suitability, but the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum. This lack of length prevents you from fully developing your ideas, such as explaining your suitability in detail. To improve, you should expand on your professional background and why you are a good fit for the restaurant industry. Because the response is 33 words short of the requirement, the score is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter has a basic structure with a salutation and a closing. However, the paragraphing is inconsistent, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. For example, the transition between the meeting details and the job request is abrupt. You use some cohesive devices like 'First and foremost', but the overall progression is hindered by the brevity of the text. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'carer' instead of 'career', 'nhance' instead of 'enhance', and 'an pleasure' instead of 'a pleasure'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone required for a business letter. To achieve a higher score, you need to use more precise vocabulary related to professional settings and ensure your spelling is accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with articles ('in one of your restaurant'), prepositions ('In regarding the position'), and sentence structure ('which was not only a memorable event but also a motivational carer route'). The sentence fragments and punctuation errors, such as the incorrect closing 'Your faithfully', indicate a lack of control over complex structures. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction to improve clarity and accuracy.

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