Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you're well. we met in the plane journey of us last month on September 6th. I still remember that day. I set next to your sear. you introduced yourself. To be honest, I was impressed my your life and following your journey since long time. we discussed the job you offres as waiter, I would like to take opportunity to discuss the job you offered my that time.

Talking deeply in my interest of areas, I like to help people and serve them their favorite meal. early in my collage, I've got the job as a waiter. in one of the famous restaurant in colambia. I gained much knowledge of how to impress customers, how to salsify them by serving best food. how to behave with them and many more. After that I have also worked in local street food courts. so I have much experience in this field. this.

Furthermore, I am very passionate person to explore things weather it is food, person, place or anything. I would love to know different people and meet them and suggest them a new food. It helps me to earn money with following my passion.

Well, I think, I would be a great fit to the position you're looking for your restaurant. looking forward to meeting you soon and discuss this job in detail.

Yours failthfully,

Princy K.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, identified the desired role, and explained your suitability. However, the tone is inconsistent; while you use 'Dear Sir', the language throughout is quite informal (e.g., 'I hope you're well', 'To be honest'). For a formal business letter, a more professional tone is expected. Additionally, the development of your suitability is slightly repetitive, focusing heavily on general passion rather than specific professional achievements. To reach a higher band, ensure the tone remains formal throughout and provide more concrete examples of your professional accomplishments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'this.' at the end of the second paragraph is a sentence fragment that disrupts the flow. Additionally, the use of 'Furthermore' and 'Well' is slightly awkward in this context. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the text flow more naturally and improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'impressed', 'passionate', and 'opportunity'. However, there are several spelling errors ('colambia' for Colombia, 'salsify' for satisfy, 'failthfully' for faithfully) and word choice issues ('plane journey of us', 'offres' for offered). These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common words and using more precise collocations, such as 'gained experience' rather than 'gained much knowledge of how to impress'. Expanding your range of professional vocabulary would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I've got the job'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation errors (e.g., 'we met in the plane...'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, such as 'I set next to your sear' (should be 'sat' and 'seat'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.

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