Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to share my interest in joining your resturants chain also know as The India house. If you remember we met last month while travelling mumbai to delhi by Air India flight. I was seating next to you. This two hours of flight was one of the most memmorable part of my life. I learn a lot from your life experiences. That time you offer me a job in your organization and told me to reach out to you.

As an accountaint I have 3 years of experience in accounts management for vadiya groups. If there is any position open in accounts team of The India house, I will very delighted to be a part of it.

According to my education background and work experience i will be the best fit for the accountaint role. Moreover, I just completed AI software course for ABC institute which not only enhance my skills but also made me enable to implement AI software to manage accounts automaticle without error.

I am hoping postitive response from you.

Your sincerely

Sheebu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided a rationale for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is a bit generic given you met the person personally. The ideas are relevant, though the development of your suitability could be slightly more professional. Overall, the task requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific request and then to your qualifications. Paragraphing is used to separate these ideas, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic. Phrases like 'Moreover' and 'According to' are used correctly, but the flow between sentences could be improved with more varied linking words to avoid a slightly repetitive structure. The referencing is clear, and the letter is easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. There are some spelling errors, such as 'resturants', 'memmorable', 'accountaint', and 'automaticle', which are noticeable. While you attempt to use more specific terminology like 'accounts management' and 'AI software', the spelling inaccuracies slightly detract from the professional tone. To reach a higher band, focus on accuracy in spelling and using more precise collocations, such as 'professional experience' rather than just 'experience'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'travelling mumbai to delhi' (missing 'from'), 'I was seating' (should be 'sitting'), and 'made me enable to' (should be 'enabled me to'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and verb tense consistency, such as 'I learn a lot' instead of 'I learned'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage will improve your accuracy.

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