Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir ,

I hope you are doing well . I would like to remind you that i was met you in a plant last week .Then you talked to me that you are owner of the well known restaurants which known as chain.I felt very happy to meet you .

I would like to discuss with you about job in which i am interested such as chef , waiter ,manager, cashier and customer service.

Apart from this , i think that this job would be suitable for me in the future as with the assist of good job i will develop my carrer.

I hope you give me good advice for my job .

I look forward to your response as soon as possible and i would like to met you again if i get an opporunities.

yours sincerely ,

kamalpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: reminding the recipient of the meeting, stating the desired job, and explaining suitability. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. The explanation of suitability is particularly weak and generic, lacking specific examples of skills or experience. To improve, you should expand on why you are a good fit for a specific role rather than listing five different job titles, which makes your interest seem unfocused. Because the response is under-length, the score is penalized accordingly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter follows a basic structure with an opening, body paragraphs, and a closing. However, the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. For example, the transition 'Apart from this' is used incorrectly to introduce a new point about suitability. Paragraphing is present but the ideas within the paragraphs are not well-connected. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'which known as chain', which makes the text difficult to follow in places. More variety in linking words would improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'good' and 'job' throughout the letter. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'in a plant' (likely meaning 'on a plane') and 'with the assist of' (instead of 'with the help of' or 'through'). The phrase 'which known as chain' is grammatically and lexically awkward. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to professional correspondence and demonstrate better control over word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses and sentence structure. Examples include 'i was met you' (should be 'I met you'), 'you talked to me that you are owner' (should be 'you told me you were the owner'), and 'i would like to met you' (should be 'I would like to meet you'). The use of 'i' is consistently uncapitalized. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.

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