Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Respected Sir,

I am writing this letter to remind you about our meeting in plane, I sat next to you from Delhi to Mumbai flight. It was an honor to meet you.

First of all, Thankyou for giving me the suggestion of contacting you for the possible job opportunity in one of your restaurant. I would like to mention here about my previous work experience and my qualification, I have a bachelor degree in hotel management I worked as a operational manager in three different restaurants which have a niche of serving multi-international cuisines.

I have an expertise in handling customers, organizing staff and running a cost effective management, I strongly believes that i can generate more output in terms of profit, clients plus great customer satisfaction.

I would like to request that kindly consider my work experience and academic qualification and give me a chance, I will attach my resume with this letter.

I will look forward for your response.

Your sincerely

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the businessman of the meeting, specified your interest in a management role, and provided relevant reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Respected Sir' is slightly unconventional for a business context in English; 'Dear Mr [Name]' or 'Dear Sir/Madam' would be more standard. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, fulfilling the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'First of all' and 'I would like to mention', which help the flow of information. However, the transition between sentences could be smoother in some areas. For instance, the second paragraph is a bit dense with information; breaking it up or using more varied linking words would improve the overall structure. The progression of ideas is clear, and the letter is easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'operational manager', 'multi-international cuisines', and 'cost-effective management'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'niche of serving' (which is slightly unnatural) and 'generate more output' (which is a bit vague). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for a higher band score. Expanding your use of professional collocations would enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'meeting in plane' should be 'meeting on the plane', 'I strongly believes' should be 'I strongly believe', and 'I will look forward for your response' should be 'I look forward to your response'. Additionally, there are some punctuation issues, such as comma splices in the second paragraph. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score.

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