Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

My name is shine, I am writing this letter to remind that we met recently in a plane journey from Delhi to America.We sat togateher and really had a productive talk. I remember that you were saying about your business and about your chain of restaurants. So I approached you because I really need a job and while finding a job I remind about you so I am writng this letter to you.

Here I m providing my educational details that I have completed graduation in commerce and business studies and also have three years work experience in customer care services. So I am looking for a job where I can directly interact with the custommers and it will also help me to improve my communication skills and interpersonal skills. I am really interested in helping out people and understanding their concerns.

I think this job will be suitable for me as per my interests. I am suitable for the job because I am hard working, reliable, quick learner, trustworthy and really intersetd to work with your reputed restaurant. I really want to learn and grow with your business.

I will be thankful to you if you give me a chance to work in your restaurant.

Thank you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You successfully identified the context of the meeting, specified your interest in a customer-facing role, and provided reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal business letter, although the opening 'Dear sir' is slightly generic; using the businessman's name would be more professional. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, fulfilling the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, with each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic and repetitive (e.g., 'So I...', 'I am...'). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, such as 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', or 'In light of this'.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'productive', 'interpersonal skills', and 'reputed'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'togateher', 'custommers', 'intersetd') and some word choice issues, such as 'remind about you' instead of 'remembered you'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a broader range of precise vocabulary to convey your professional intentions more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'remind that we met' (should be 'remind you that we met'), 'I am writng' (spelling), and 'I am suitable for the job because I am hard working' (punctuation/hyphenation). There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. Increasing the frequency of error-free sentences and refining your control over complex structures will help improve your score in this criterion.

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