Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear friend,

I hope you are doing well.

Today I am writing this letter to remind you that a few days ago I was going to goa trip with my husband, and you were also on the same plane; we discussed things related to our jobs.

It was three days ago; I was free from a hectic, hard work schedule, and then I decided to go to Goa with my husband to spend some precious time with each other. Hopefully, we booked tickets in advance. We were really very thrilled and excited regarding this wonderful trip.

Moreover, I got a seat near the window on the plane, which was next to you when you talked with me about your business. You told me that you had a restaurant in Delhi, and you also gave me your visiting card.

I am very interested in this job because I have many years of cooking experience so I would be the best fit for this job.

I would be thankful, if you give me this opportunity to strive hard in your restaurant.

Your faithfully

RRRR

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it reminds the recipient of the meeting, specifies the desired job, and explains the candidate's suitability. However, the tone is inconsistent. The prompt asks for a letter to a businessman met on a plane, which requires a professional yet polite tone. Starting with 'Dear friend' is inappropriate for a professional contact. Furthermore, the narrative about the trip to Goa is overly detailed and irrelevant to the purpose of the letter, which should focus more on the professional connection. While the task is fulfilled, the lack of appropriate register and the inclusion of unnecessary personal details limit the development of the professional purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as the transition 'Hopefully, we booked tickets in advance,' which does not logically connect to the previous sentence. The flow between the personal anecdote about the trip and the professional request is disjointed. While there is a clear overall arrangement, the logical progression is hindered by the inclusion of irrelevant information and some repetitive phrasing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and professional tone required for a business-related letter. Phrases like 'hectic, hard work schedule' and 'strive hard in your restaurant' are somewhat informal or unnatural in this context. There is a limited range of vocabulary, and the student relies on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate more precise, professional collocations related to employment and business communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I was going to goa trip' (missing article/preposition) and 'Your faithfully' (incorrect form of 'Yours'). The sentence 'Hopefully, we booked tickets in advance' is grammatically correct but semantically confusing in this context. While the errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. The student needs to focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of formal closing salutations.

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