Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hello sir,

Hope are you doing well, I am writing regarding my plane journey with work in unique restaurants.

I am working as a chef in Welcome restaurant. I am different types of dishes and unique verity in meals. I think own restaurant is a good property for the content. But, I have some time for the financial condition for own restaurant. I need your suggestion for the any contact about a possible job in one of his restaurants, because you have a multiple location restaurants.

I remind you for the meeting location and give me your location and time. I will reach at your location for the meting. Your suggestion is the best advice for my carrier. Many people hesitate some giving advice or new creative idea. I need your idea and support for my carrier.

In you has multiple location restaurants, so you can give me any one location, I am great for the cooking and masterpiece for the delicious making dishes. I am good for Making Indian, South-Indian, Italian, Mexican dishes.

I am good for the cooking because as I was child, I am making a some dishes with my mom. So , I am a good for the chef. I think this happen I am suitable for the job.

Thank you for the listening my wards sir,

Yours Faithfully,

Ashish Prajapati

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: reminding the recipient of when and where they met ('plane journey with work in unique restaurants'), expressing interest in a job ('possible job in one of his restaurants'), and giving reasons for suitability ('I am great for the cooking and masterpiece for the delicious making dishes'). However, the development of these ideas is limited and the tone is frequently inappropriate for a semi-formal business letter, starting with an informal and grammatically incorrect opening ('Hello sir, Hope are you doing well'). Furthermore, some sentences are confusing and obscure the message, such as 'I think own restaurant is a good property for the content.' Despite these shortcomings, the purpose of the letter remains discernible. This places the performance firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks logical organisation and clear progression. While paragraph breaks are attempted, they often divide single thoughts awkwardly or group disparate ideas together. Cohesive devices are used minimally and frequently incorrectly, such as the abrupt transitions ('So , I am a good for the chef' and 'In you has multiple location restaurants'). Referencing is also confusing at times, creating a disjointed reading experience. The lack of proper linking phrases and control over discourse markers prevents the ideas from flowing smoothly. These features are characteristic of Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to ensure smooth progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural. The student relies heavily on simple words and produces frequent lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'delicious making dishes', 'masterpiece for the delicious making dishes', and 'financial condition for own restaurant'. There are also incorrect word forms like 'carrier' instead of 'career' and 'wards' instead of 'words'. The range of vocabulary is strictly limited and inadequate for discussing professional employment needs effectively, resulting in frequent strain for the reader. This performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The student demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex or compound structures that are heavily flawed (e.g., 'Hope are you doing well', 'In you has multiple location restaurants'). Basic grammatical rules are frequently broken, including subject-verb agreement, verb tenses ('as I was child, I am making a some dishes'), and prepositions ('reach at your location'). Errors are pervasive and occasionally distort the intended meaning, causing significant difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4 performance.

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