Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Arif,

I want to remind you about our plane journey in which we discussed about a pontential opportunity in one of the most busy and antique resturant in our aera.

However, I was very delighted to know that there are numerous opportunities are still open related to Account and finance depertment. Seeing this I want to be a part of Accounts depertment, becasue I have 5 years of professional experience in this particular flied and more suprisengly I have vast managment experties also in my current role I am resoponsible of handling a divers team contains of 15 members.

Moreover, this role is quiet suitable for me in terms of handling and organizing a large team. I am familiar with all the job descripitions and top of that I have sharpen my analytical skills as well the abality to work under pressure. With that I am confident to produce error free managment report that will eventually crucial for business health.

Yours Sincerely,

Hamza

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The candidate successfully covers all bullet points required in the task instructions. First, the letter opens by reminding the recipient of their recent plane journey and meeting context ("plane journey in which we discussed about a pontential opportunity"). Second, the writer clearly identifies the desired role within the accounts and finance department ("Accounts depertment"). Third, the letter provides solid justifications for why the writer is suitable, citing five years of professional experience and strong management expertise ("handling a divers team contains of 15 members"). The tone is appropriately polite and semi-formal, fulfilling the requirements of a general business correspondence task well. Although there are numerous mechanical and spelling errors throughout the text, the core message and all functional requirements are fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into clear, distinct paragraphs that correspond to the standard conventions of personal and business correspondence. There is a logical progression of ideas: the opening establishes the context, the body paragraphs explain the job interest and suitability, and the closing offers a polite sign-off. Cohesive devices are used to link sentences and ideas, although some transitions feel a bit awkward or repetitive, such as starting paragraphs with "However," or "Moreover,". Referencing is generally clear, and the overall structure makes the letter easy to follow, even though micro-level cohesion could be refined for greater natural flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for a professional context, including terms like "professional experience", "analytical skills", and "error free managment report". However, lexical resource is held back by frequent spelling mistakes (e.g., "pontential" for potential, "resturant" for restaurant, "aera" for area, "depertment" for department, "suprisengly" for surprisingly, "experties" for expertise, "resoponsible" for responsible, "descripitions" for descriptions) and some awkward collocations or word choices ("discussed about", "divers team contains of 15 members"). While the vocabulary used is adequate to convey the intended meaning, the density of spelling and word-form errors prevents the score from reaching higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and conditional structures ("that will eventually crucial for business health"). However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several noticeable errors involving prepositions, articles, and verb forms, such as "discussed about" (unnecessary preposition), "numerous opportunities are still open" (tense/clause structure issue), and "this role is quiet suitable" (spelling of quite). Furthermore, punctuation is occasionally weak, and minor slip-ups occur in sentence construction. Despite these issues, the communication is not impeded, and the examiner can easily follow the candidate's arguments.

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