Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you met
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
hi sir
how are you hope doing well sir my name is awais you and me meet in plane last night flight sir you saying i am own of food chain companies sir i am chef i need job i am good chef my working experince sine 10 years and i have also certifcate good institute and i check indeed job sir your company need chef sir any psobilty chef job and another good option sir kindly tell me any if any posibility and sir i am very responsible guy and very good persanality i already summit my cv in your company hr kindly sir help me and give me good job humble request i know sir your chain give me very good salary and good benefits and also anual holidays sir please are interview and give me suitable job thanku so much sir humble request regarding awais bhatti
muhammad
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response successfully covers all the bullet points required by the task prompt. You reminded the reader where and when you met, stating 'you and me meet in plane last night flight'. You clearly stated the job you are interested in, noting that 'i am chef' and 'your company need chef'. Furthermore, you explained why you would be suitable by highlighting your professional background, mentioning 'my working experince sine 10 years' and that you have a certificate. Although the tone and register are overly informal and conversational rather than professional, the communication of the required information is complete and fulfills the necessary criteria for a lower band achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing and is presented as a single, continuous block of text, which makes reading difficult. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused; sentences are strung together using repetitive conjunctions and pronouns, such as repeating 'sir' frequently as a transitional element. There is no clear progression of ideas as thoughts flow directly into one another without proper punctuation or separation. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example in phrases like 'you saying i am own of food chain companies'. Overall, the organization is basic and shows significant limitations in structural cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'job', 'good', and 'chef'. There are numerous spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'experince' instead of experience, 'sine' instead of since, 'certifcate' instead of certificate, and 'psobilty' instead of possibility. Words are often used with incorrect parts of speech or in improper collocations, as seen in 'you saying i am own of food chain companies' and 'are interview'. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, but the high frequency of errors restricts the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the writing is heavily flawed. The response consists mostly of simple, run-on clauses linked together without appropriate punctuation or capitalization. There are severe issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and missing auxiliary verbs, as demonstrated in 'you and me meet in plane last night' and 'i already summit my cv'. Complex sentence structures are generally absent, and where attempted, they are inaccurate. Punctuation is virtually non-existent, creating major comprehension difficulties. Frequent errors distort meaning in several places, keeping the grammatical accuracy at a lower band level.
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