Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

As per your suggestion, I am writing this letter to request about a job in your one of the fine restaurants.

During a recent plane journey, we met and talked about my interest in a chain of food restuarants. Having a professional degree in the hotel management, I am interested in a such job where I can upgrade my skill by learning more from an productive environment. Moreover, since I have an experince in the customer service, It would be great to get in customer attendant postion.

I would be great fit for customer service, as I have an experince in the customer service and received several positive feedback from the past manager.I have attached my CV in this email. if you are in need of any information from my side, you may contact me. I hope you consider my application and I am waiting for your responce.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task satisfactorily. You successfully remind the businessman about when and where you met by mentioning a recent plane journey and discussing food restaurants. You clearly state your interest in a customer attendant position and explain why you would be suitable by highlighting your professional degree in hotel management and your prior experience in customer service. The bullet points from the prompt are fully integrated and developed throughout the letter. The tone is appropriately professional and polite for a job inquiry. Although there are some minor awkward expressions like 'request about a job in your one of the fine restaurants', the core communicative purpose of the task is successfully achieved. Based on these strengths, this response earns a solid band score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter maintains a clear overall progression and coherent structure. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate the introduction, body details regarding qualifications, and the closing remarks. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'since' are utilized to connect ideas logically. However, referencing is occasionally slightly clumsy, as seen in phrases like 'your one of the fine restaurants' and 'a such job'. Additionally, some transitions feel somewhat mechanical. Despite these minor lapses in cohesion, the logical organization is clear throughout, and the reader can easily follow the sequence of ideas from the meeting reminder to the job application details, supporting a clear band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items related to hospitality such as 'hotel management', 'customer service', and 'professional degree'. However, there are notable word choice errors and typos throughout the response, such as 'restuarants', 'an productive environment', and 'experince'. Phrases like 'get in customer attendant postion' also show awkward collocation. While these errors do not impede communication since the reader can easily understand your meaning, they prevent the lexical score from reaching higher bands. Improving proofreading for basic spelling and collocation accuracy will significantly boost your lexical performance in future tasks.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt at structures with participial phrases, such as 'Having a professional degree in the hotel management...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing choices, including 'request about a job in your one of the fine restaurants', 'an productive environment', and 'It would be great to get in customer attendant postion'. Punctuation and capitalization errors also occur, such as a missing space after a full stop before 'I have attached'. Nevertheless, the meaning remains clear and communication is not impeded by these issues. The command of grammar is sufficient to meet the descriptors for a band 6.0.

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