Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you met
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
dear sir,
we met in the flight journey from india to canad you told me about your resturants and i am intereste to work in your resturant
so i had done my bachelor degree in hotel management i want to work as a chief in your resturant i learned and present differnt type of food related to any country now i am doing masters in hotel management which i would be an asset for you
i am a very hardworking girl and does not give you any chance of complaint additionally i am a faced learner so i can catch all the new things very quickly it would be a great chance if you give me opportunity to work in your resturant i will not disappoint you as i am upgrading my skill i will try to add new things which will give more benefits in your resturant
your faithfully ,
sonali.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The candidate has successfully addressed all bullet points required by the prompt. You remind the recipient of where and when you met, stating 'we met in the flight journey from india to canad', specify the kind of job you are interested in by mentioning 'i want to work as a chief in your resturant', and explain why you would be suitable by highlighting your background in hotel management, your hardworking nature, and your ability to learn quickly. While the expression and development are somewhat basic and contain minor factual or lexical slips (e.g., 'chief' instead of 'chef'), all core communicative requirements of the task have been covered well. Therefore, this performance satisfies the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks conventional paragraphing and punctuation, making it read as a single continuous block of text in the second half. There are no clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the purpose of the letter, and the concluding remarks. Furthermore, cohesive devices are minimal or misused, such as 'so i had done' and 'which i would be an asset'. Although there is a discernible overall arrangement and your ideas follow a logical sequence from meeting to job application, the mechanical and faulty use of cohesion prevents the text from achieving a higher score. This aligns well with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, such as 'work', 'job', and 'resturant' (spelled incorrectly multiple times). There are several spelling and word-choice errors, including 'flight journey', 'intereste', 'chief' (intended to be chef), 'differnt', and 'faced learner' (intended to be fast learner). These errors are noticeable and require the reader to interpret your intent, although they do not completely impede communication. Because the lexical range is limited and contains frequent spelling inaccuracies, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Your writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'which i would be an asset for you' and 'it would be a great chance if you give me opportunity'. However, there is a total lack of standard punctuation, capitalisation, and sentence boundaries (run-on sentences without periods or commas). Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense inconsistencies ('i had done') and missing articles ('give me opportunity'). These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate weak control over basic sentence mechanics, placing this response firmly at Band 5.0.
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