Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am RAJ ,How are doing ?I hope rembemer me we were met in recent plane joureny ,in the month of August 31st from Dheli to Banglore by Air India at 9pm to 10.30pm of our duration discucced time about each of them .Actually yours own restaurants were going to hire in the next month .Right now i had completeted my hotel mangement graduation i got 85 percent of graduation ,last week i got my certificates and all .

So, i am going to attach my resume here .You are looking for junior shef may be my resume will sutable to that position . i am also very much interset to work in restaurants. These is my first job to apply .May be i am suitable to work in restaurants .You have chain of restaurants like pure vegiterian and non vegiterian and fast foods . I did all kind of food able make with good tast and flover and i am very well trained to make carving plates with using vegetables and fruits. Your any branch also i am happy to work ,because i am staying in your loaction i can able work any branch of your restautant all are comfortable to travel to my area and good connectivity transportation available.I hope my resume is suitable to job ,give one chance to prove my self .

Thank for youn kind and time considering ,i look forward to here from you .

your faithfully ,

Raj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions. You reminded the reader where and when you met on the flight from Delhi to Bangalore, stated that you are interested in a junior chef position following your hotel management graduation, and explained why you would be suitable by mentioning your culinary training, skills in preparing various dishes and vegetable carvings, and your convenience regarding restaurant locations. The tone is appropriately semi-formal, although it leans slightly informal in places. The purpose of the letter is clearly communicated from the outset, and all ideas are extended with relevant supporting details. Overall, the task is fully addressed in a satisfactory manner, earning a band score of 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear purpose, but the paragraphing and mechanical cohesion require improvement. The text is essentially split into a greeting, one very long block paragraph containing multiple ideas, and a closing sign-off. This lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the flow slightly disjointed. Cohesive devices are sometimes faulty, repetitive, or missing, leading to abrupt transitions between sentences (for example, 'Right now i had completeted... So, i am going to attach...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors further disrupt the logical progression of ideas. While the progression is understandable, the organisational flaws restrict the score to a 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, successfully incorporating topic-specific terms such as 'hotel management graduation', 'resume', 'junior chef', and 'pure vegiterian and non vegiterian'. However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'joureny', 'completeted', 'mangement', 'shef', 'interset', 'tast', and 'flover'. Less common lexical items are attempted, but inaccuracies in spelling and collocation occasionally cause strain for the reader. Despite these noticeable errors, the meaning is generally conveyed, supporting a band score of 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as conditional and causal clauses (e.g., 'because i am staying in your loaction i can able work any branch'). However, there is a high frequency of grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies, missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences (e.g., 'How are doing ?I hope rembemer me we were met...'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, with spaces incorrectly placed before punctuation marks and capitalisation errors. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at a band 4.5 level, rounded to 5.0 for overall comprehensibility.

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