Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to remind you about our last meeting during our plane journey.

I hope so you remind he we were sitting next to eachother during our flight journey from India to vancouver during our conservation you tolal me. You own several restaurant where you can provide me a job. near by resident in Surrey.

Moreover, I already have front desk Supervisor experience from India where I use to assign job to coworker front host like which host cleaning table. and which one help server to provide drinks to customers so, I would like to continue as a front desk Supervisor and so, if you have any related to my experience I would to happy join in.

if you have opening job of as a supervisor in your restaurant I will be very interested in that position moreover it would related to past experience so I will less time to fit in that job .

I hope to heard from your soon .

Yours faithfully ,

Nancy K

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt, though the development is somewhat basic. The letter successfully reminds the businessman of the meeting during the flight from India to Vancouver, expresses interest in a front desk supervisor position, and explains suitability based on previous experience coordinating coworkers. While all bullet points are covered, the ideas lack full extension, and the tone fluctuates slightly between formal and informal. Nevertheless, the main communicative goals of the task are achieved, which aligns the response with the Band 6 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter exhibits a coherent overall arrangement, but paragraphing and mechanical cohesion are problematic. The division into paragraphs is somewhat irregular, with abrupt transitions between ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as repetitive run-on structures and the excessive use of connectors like 'moreover' and 'so' without appropriate punctuation. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in pronoun ambiguity and fragmented sentences like 'if you have any related to my experience I would to happy join in.' Overall organization is present, but progression is hindered by mechanical errors, placing this criterion at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey basic ideas regarding employment and restaurant experience. However, the range is limited, and there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'total' instead of 'told', 'conservation' instead of 'conversation', and 'resident' instead of 'reside'. Less common vocabulary attempts, like 'front desk Supervisor', are repeated rather than varied. While communication is generally maintained, these errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from reaching a higher band, making Band 5.0 an accurate assessment.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, incorrect verb tenses, and missing punctuation marks, such as 'I hope so you remind he we were sitting next to eachother' and 'I would to happy join in.' Sentences frequently run on without proper terminal punctuation. These persistent errors cause frequent difficulty for the reader and reflect the characteristics of Band 4.0, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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