Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mr Goldsmith,

This letter is to apply for an employment opportunity available at your restaurant chain in Toronto.

I am Suman, we encountered each other in a flight from Vancouver to Toronto on 5th September, 2026. During our conversation you told me about your business and asked me to contact you for job at one of your restaurants.

Restaurant settings intrest me a lot. This is not only the place where employees can learn crucial skills like communication and time management but also get to know about people from different professions. Therefore, I would like to work as a shift manager where I can lead my team in delivering the best customer service to the customers.

Moreover, my previous work experience for 3 years as a shift manager at Cactus Club cub has made me the suitable person for this role. Being at this position I understand my responsibilities towards my fellow peers as well as the customer satisfaction.

I hope you consider my application for this role. I look forward to your prompt response.

Yours sincerely,

Suman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully covers all bullet points required by the prompt. You appropriately remind the recipient when and where you met, stating 'we encountered each other in a flight from Vancouver to Toronto on 5th September, 2026.' You clearly identify the position you are interested in, specifying 'shift manager,' and explain your suitability by highlighting your previous three years of experience at 'Cactus Club cub' and your understanding of customer satisfaction and peer leadership. The tone is polite and professional, fulfilling the general training letter requirements fully and effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter exhibits clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Each paragraph has a distinct focus, moving smoothly from the purpose of the letter to the context of the meeting, the desired position, and finally your qualifications. Cohesive devices such as 'Therefore,' 'Moreover,' and referencing pronouns like 'This' are used effectively to connect ideas, though occasional mechanical transitions appear. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct points, making the overall arrangement coherent and easy to follow for the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary used is sufficient to convey your message with adequate flexibility and precision for the task. You attempt less common items and industry-relevant terms such as 'employment opportunity,' 'customer service,' and 'responsibilities.' However, there are a few minor lexical inaccuracies and typos, such as 'in a flight' instead of 'on a flight,' 'intrest' (spelling error), and 'Cactus Club cub' (likely a typo for 'club' or 'cafe'). Despite these occasional errors, the vocabulary is clear and communicates your meaning successfully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response demonstrates a good mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses and conditional ideas like 'where I can lead my team in delivering the best customer service.' There are some minor grammatical errors, such as 'Being at this position' instead of 'Being in this position' and 'experience for 3 years' which could be phrased more naturally. Punctuation is generally sound, and the errors present do not impede communication, allowing for smooth readability throughout the letter.

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