Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir

i am writing this letter to tell you that i want to get oppurtunity at your resturant. I am would be greatful to get your attention towards me.

i am a harding working and a responsible person and i have already work in my own resturant in UAE but now i want to join your resturant as i have sold out my resturant due to some finanacial issues and as your resturant is in a beatiful place in pakistan and i am also pakistani nationality holder so as your resturant is also close to my home so, i can easily come to your resturant and after giving my duty there i can easily go back to my home

I will be very thankful to you and i will alwasy perform my duty honestly.

thanking yours

obaid ur rehman

[redacted phone]

[redacted email]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions. You reminded the reader where and when you met, stated that you are interested in a job at their restaurant, and provided reasons why you would be suitable, such as your previous experience running your own restaurant in the UAE and living close to the restaurant in Pakistan. However, your ideas are somewhat limited and repetitive, and the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement at 142 words. This under-length impacts the full development of your ideas. Therefore, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, with most of the body text crammed into a single run-on sentence and a massive block paragraph. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, relying heavily on repetitive conjunctions such as 'and'. There is a lack of clear logical progression throughout the text. Although the overall intent of the message is understandable, the structural organization does not meet the standards for a higher band. Consequently, a band score of 4.5 reflects these mechanical and organizational shortcomings.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as 'resturant', 'job', and 'good'. There are noticeable spelling errors throughout the text, including 'oppurtunity', 'resturant', 'greatful', 'harding', and 'alwasy'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with some errors in word choice and collocation. Because the vocabulary does not advance beyond simple descriptive terms and contains frequent spelling mistakes, a band score of 5.0 is assigned.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. The majority of the text consists of one extremely long run-on sentence joined by multiple coordinating conjunctions. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as capitalization issues ('i'), incorrect verb forms ('I am would be'), missing articles, and punctuation errors. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in parsing the sentence boundaries. Therefore, a band score of 4.5 is warranted.

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