Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

Hopefully you are doing well. Remember we had a flight together from Dubai to Pakistan last month.We were siting together.You told me about your business of resturents and I was so impressed with you.I hope now you remember me.

Well,Now a days I am also looking for job as I compeleted my education.You are the first person who hits my mind.So, I was looking for a job as a chef maneger as food is my pession.

I want to get experence from your resturent because your resturent hip is very high.And I know how to cook different countries food because I was working in a resturent in Dubai.Recently i move to Pakistan and now I really wants to starts work again.It will be a great honor if I get job in your resturant.Looking forward to your answer.

Regards

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by reminding the recipient of the meeting on the flight, stating the job of interest, and explaining suitability due to previous experience. However, some ideas are under-developed, such as the vague mention of experience without specific details about the previous restaurant role. Furthermore, important note: this response contains only 140 words, which means the minimum length requirement of 150 words was NOT met, resulting in a direct penalty to your score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical sequence from the initial greeting and reminder to the job inquiry and closing. Paragraphing is attempted, though formatting and paragraph breaks are somewhat unconventional. Cohesive devices are occasionally mechanical or basic, such as using 'Well,' and 'So,' to transition between sentences. Referencing is mostly clear, but the flow would be enhanced with a wider and more natural variety of linking words to connect your personal background to your professional ambitions more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic message. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'resturents', 'compeleted', 'chef maneger', 'pession', and 'experence', which cause some distraction for the reader. While you attempt some less common terminology relevant to the hospitality industry, inaccurate word forms and spelling mistakes prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher level. More careful proofreading of common professional terms is strongly recommended.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammar demonstrates a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with occasional attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent errors in tense usage, capitalization, and punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods ('month.We', 'sitting', 'Now a days', 'i move', 'wants to starts'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage also show persistent inaccuracies, for instance saying 'look for job' without an article. These frequent errors require the reader to decode the meaning at times.

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