Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to request for getting employment in one of his restaurants.I would be grateful if you could consider my capabilties and organisining skills

Firstly i let you know we met while we were travelling from Surrey to Brumpton by flight and you sat beside with me.After making conversion, i came to know that you are owner of number of restaurants in different states of canada.At that time i felt stressed because of my academic exams and other thing where i need to focused. You encourged me for consistent efforts and a positive mindset always help to achieve goals.

I would like to inform you that i am looking for part-time job at surrey restaurant. I also have 2 years experience of working in resaturant as kitchen helper.

I have good cullinary skiils and enough knowledge about ingredients of preparing meals.

Thanks for your support and assistance.

Your faithfully,

Rajvir Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three required points: you identify the flight from Surrey to Brumpton, explain that you want part-time work at the Surrey restaurant, and give relevant experience and skills. The two years as a kitchen helper and your culinary knowledge support your suitability. However, some details are less fully developed or unclear. For example, the reference to feeling stressed about exams and the businessman’s encouragement is not clearly connected to why you would be a good employee. The opening also says “one of his restaurants” rather than directly addressing the businessman, which makes the request less clear. Make the job request explicit and add a specific example of how your experience would help in the role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the purpose to the meeting, the job sought, and your qualifications. Paragraph breaks help separate these points, and “Firstly” and “I would like to inform you” signal transitions. However, the progression is sometimes difficult to follow: the account of exam stress and encouragement interrupts the reminder of how you met without clearly supporting the job application. Some links are mechanical, and the opening combines several ideas without clear punctuation. Organise the letter into focused paragraphs—meeting, role, and suitability—and use direct links such as “As you suggested, I am contacting you…” to make the relationship between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the application, including “part-time job,” “experience,” “kitchen helper,” and “ingredients,” so the reader can understand the kind of work you seek. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “culinary skills” and “consistent efforts.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “capabilties,” “organisining,” “conversion” where “conversation” is intended, and “resaturant.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “request for getting employment” and “owner of number of restaurants.” These choices sometimes make the message less fluent. Learn common collocations for job applications and proofread spelling; for example, say “apply for a position” and “a chain of restaurants.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message is generally recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction, articles, prepositions, and punctuation occur often enough to affect fluency. For instance, “I am writing to request for getting employment” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, while “you sat beside with me” uses an unnecessary preposition. In “i came to know that you are owner,” the pronoun should be capitalised and an article is needed before “owner.” Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, and “Your faithfully” does not use the correct form of the closing. Practise accurate application-letter patterns and check each sentence for complete structure, articles, and punctuation.

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