Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

i am writing about the join your restaurant because i am huge interest to enroll this job. Actually i love cooking when i am free from my work along with i done my graduation in cooking so i have a lot of knowledge . So i decide to met on tuesday 23 October in city hall which is very popular in my hometown. Actually i want to hire here as a accountant because i done my Post graduation in it. In addition, i also work in as a chef becase i know number of recipes about vegetarian and non vegetarian as a result, i can help in it. I think i am suitable for that job because i have number of skills including communication, problem solving and team work so i can easily adjust their environment.

I hope you review my profile as soon as so i can start work as soon ass possible.

Yours faithfully,

Gagan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt to cover all three points: you refer to meeting on “Tuesday 23 October in city hall,” express interest in an accountant role, and give reasons such as your postgraduate study and communication skills. However, the meeting reminder is unclear because you do not mention the plane journey or explain that the businessman owns the restaurant chain. Your job preference is also confusing: you first discuss cooking and working as a chef, then say you want to be an accountant, without clarifying whether you are applying for one role or both. The suitability reasons are relevant but briefly listed rather than explained. Make the context of your meeting explicit and develop one clear job preference with supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The letter follows a basic sequence from explaining why you are writing to describing your qualifications and requesting a response. However, the ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow. For example, “i love cooking” and your cooking qualification lead into the meeting details, before the letter shifts to an accountant role and then back to chef work. Connectors such as “Actually,” “In addition,” and “as a result” do not always show the relationship between ideas clearly. Use separate paragraphs for the meeting and purpose, your preferred role and suitability, and your closing request. Clearer transitions would make the message easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for employment and qualifications, including “accountant,” “chef,” “recipes,” “communication,” and “problem solving.” This gives the reader a general understanding of your interests and strengths. However, several word choices and combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “huge interest to enroll this job,” “hire here as a accountant,” and “adjust their environment.” These errors sometimes make your intended meaning less clear, particularly when describing the role you want. Aim for standard professional expressions and check spelling and word forms, including “because,” “meet,” and “soon as possible.” A more precise range of job-related language would make the letter sound more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and linking expressions, as in “I think I am suitable for that job because…” and “I know number of recipes… as a result…”. However, sentence structures are limited and many sentences contain errors that can make the message difficult to understand. Examples include “i am writing about the join your restaurant,” “i decide to met,” and “i done my Post graduation.” These show problems with verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, and some sentences run together without clear boundaries. Practise accurate past-tense forms for the meeting and qualifications, and use shorter, correctly punctuated sentences before attempting longer ones.

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