Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear manger,

I am writing this letter to reastaurant manger regarding a job my name is jashanpreet singh i live near your restaurant and i dont have work i have hotel management program in sheridan college davis campus.

Therefore i have exeperience 4 year in my background country please give me a cheff job in your hotel and i give best in my side as well as i do work honestly whichg is beneifical for you and me.

if you give me this job to me and can easily complete my basic needs .So, please give me thsi job i humble request you.

your faithfully

Jashanpreet singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify that you want a chef job and mention relevant experience and hotel-management study, so the reader can understand your basic purpose. However, the letter does not address the key situation: you do not remind the businessman when or where you met, and you do not clearly explain why your experience makes you suitable. The opening also addresses a “manger” rather than the businessman, and the request for work at “your hotel” does not match the restaurant context. The response is 43 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop the required points. Add the flight details, describe your restaurant or kitchen skills, and explain how these would benefit his business.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The ideas follow a basic sequence: you introduce yourself, request a chef position, and explain that work would help meet your needs. This gives the letter a recognisable purpose. However, nearly all the information is compressed into one paragraph, and the long opening sentence joins several unrelated points without clear transitions. The repeated requests—“please give me a cheff job” and “please give me thsi job”—also make the progression feel circular. Use separate paragraphs for the meeting and introduction, your job interest and suitability, and your closing request. Clear links such as “As we discussed on the flight” would help the reader follow the letter.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and hospitality, including “hotel management,” “experience,” and “honestly,” which helps communicate your general aim. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or spellings make the letter less clear or less appropriate: “restaurant manger,” “cheff job,” and “in your hotel” do not accurately fit the situation. “I give best in my side” is also not a natural way to describe your contribution. Build a more precise set of job-related expressions, such as “kitchen experience,” “food preparation,” and “reliable employee.” Check spelling and choose wording that suits a formal letter to a business owner.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and an attempt to connect ideas with “therefore” and “if,” showing some effort to form longer sentences. However, sentence boundaries and grammatical relationships are often unclear. For example, “my name is jashanpreet singh i live near your restaurant” runs several clauses together, while “if you give me this job to me and can easily complete my basic needs” is incomplete and difficult to interpret. Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “I have hotel management program” and “experience 4 year.” Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check verb forms, articles, plurals, and punctuation. Short, accurate sentences would make your meaning easier to follow.

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