Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jane,

I hope you are doing great. Myself krishnkant the same person you met on the flight of Toronto to Seattle. I am writing this letter in regarding of our conversation regarding the Job opportunity with your company.

I just return from my vacation from Seattle and looking for fresh start. I have not only did my research on you and your business, but also find out some job roles available with your organization and also suits my profile and previous experience. One of them is "Area Manger" role for GTA region in Canada.

I strongly believe that I am the perfect candidate with the strong educational background and with impressive experience and working record. I also fulfill all the requirements for the available position. Regarding my education background I hold Master in Hotel Management services From McMaster university and furthermore, I also holds an experience of more than 6 years in the fast food restaurant sector, where I also served as General Manger for well know Franchise model.

I hope you do acknowledge my job application request for Area Manager role. I am also hereby attaching my necessary documents and resume with this letter.

I look forward to hear back from you soon and scheduling a interview with your team.

Thanks and Regards,

Krishnkant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you remind Jane that you met on the flight from Toronto to Seattle, identify the Area Manager role in the GTA, and explain your suitability through your hotel-management qualification and six years in the restaurant sector. These details make your purpose clear and support your application. The reference to having researched the business and attaching documents also fits the situation. To make the response more fully developed, specify one or two relevant achievements or responsibilities from your previous General Manager role, rather than relying mainly on broad claims such as “I fulfill all the requirements” and “the perfect candidate.” A more specific example would make your case more persuasive and individual.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible sequence: it recalls the meeting, introduces the job interest, presents qualifications, and closes with a request for a response. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Regarding my education background” signal a shift to supporting details. The progression is clear overall, but some links feel repetitive or mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “also” and “regarding.” The opening paragraph also combines the introduction and purpose in a way that could be smoother. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make the relationship between your research, the vacancy, and your experience more explicit. The closing request for an interview is appropriate, though it could connect more directly to the specific role.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to a job enquiry, including “job opportunity,” “Area Manager,” “educational background,” and “restaurant sector,” so the reader can understand the purpose and your experience. There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “necessary documents” and “available position.” However, noticeable word-choice, collocation, spelling, and word-form problems reduce precision: “in regarding of,” “fresh start,” “General Manger,” and “well know Franchise model” are either inaccurate or awkward in this context. Some phrases, such as “strong educational background” and “impressive experience,” are broad rather than specific. Aim for accurate professional collocations and use concrete terms to describe your responsibilities and achievements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mixture of simple and more complex structures, including “I strongly believe that…” and the sentence beginning “I have not only… but also…”. The overall meaning remains understandable, and the letter has a recognisable formal structure. However, errors occur across verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “I just return” needs a past-tense form, while “I also holds” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. “I look forward to hear back” requires a gerund, and “scheduling a interview” has an article error. The opening fragment “Myself krishnkant…” is also not a complete, natural sentence. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, then review tense, agreement, and articles before submitting.

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