Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jane,

I hope you are doing great. Myslef krishnkant, we have met on the flight from Toronto to Seattle. I am writing this letter to check the posibilty for job opprotunity in your restaurant.

I just came back from my vacation from seattle and now i looking for frest start in restauarnt services. I had research about you and your business and also went through the job opportunities available with your restaurant chain. I felt that Area manger opprtunity in Greater Toronto area fits with my profile and educiational background.

I am an appropriate candidate for this role as I fulfill all requirements according to the job description and futhermore, I personally believe that my 6years experience in the fast food sector would an assest for this role and also my strong educational background and my hotel management degree from Mcmaster University would be like a "Cherry on the cake". Moreover, in my previous role i have also earned the experience of General manger with reknown Franchise which display my skill of leadership and decision making for this role.

I have attached all the required documents and resume with this letter and do let me know if you need any more document or details raleted me or background.

I hereby looking forward to for you positive reply and connect with you or your team for interview and discuss more about this opprtunity.

Best Regards,

Krishnkant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you identify the flight from Toronto to Seattle, specify an area manager role in the Greater Toronto area, and support your suitability with six years in fast food, a hotel-management degree, and previous general-manager experience. These details make your application relevant and give the reader a clear sense of your qualifications. The explanation of why you fit the role is particularly well supported. To make the response more complete and precise, remind Jane more explicitly of the conversation in which she invited you to get in touch, and clarify whether you are applying for a specific advertised vacancy or enquiring about a possible opening. The closing request for an interview is appropriate, though it could be phrased more directly and professionally.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall progression: it opens by recalling the meeting and stating its purpose, then describes the role sought, presents qualifications, and closes with a request for contact. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and links such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” show an effort to connect supporting points. This gives the reader a coherent route through the application. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the final two paragraphs repeat the request to continue the conversation without a clear distinction between the attached documents and the desired next step. Improve the progression by grouping qualifications together and ending with one concise, specific request. Clearer sentence boundaries would also make the connections between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant employment vocabulary, including “job opportunities,” “job description,” “leadership,” “decision making,” and “hotel management degree,” so the reader can understand the role and your experience. There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “a cherry on the cake,” although this idiom is too informal for a professional application and does not sound natural in this context. Numerous spelling errors and inaccurate word forms—such as “posibilty,” “opprtunity,” “manger,” and “assest”—make the writing less polished and can slow the reader. Some phrases are also imprecise, including “frest start in restaurant services.” Build accuracy by proofreading spelling and choosing standard professional collocations, such as “a fresh start in the restaurant industry.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, particularly when explaining your experience and qualifications. The sentence beginning “I am an appropriate candidate” combines several supporting reasons, showing an effort to express a developed argument. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to process. For example, “now i looking” needs a finite verb (“I am now looking”), while “my 6 years experience … would an asset” needs both a possessive form and a verb (“my six years of experience … would be an asset”). The opening fragment, “Myslef krishnkant,” also needs to be recast as a complete sentence. Check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries, then divide long sentences where necessary.

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